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Lonely by ~ign0ranceiSbliss:iconign0ranceiSbliss:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open


silent desperation
          each moment longer than the next
                    lingering heavily in the air
                              like smoke in a humid place

          empty hearts
                    lay strewn across the ground
                              nothing can fill the void
                                      that eats them all away

                   useless struggle
                          against the sands of time
                                     playing a futile game
                                               we're all bound to lose....
©2007-2009 ~ign0ranceiSbliss
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Author's Comments

this is the first open poem i've written in a while...my style has morphed and evolved over time, and now i rarely write open...

i wrote this yesterday in govt. class....i found myself mindlessly scrawling this one.....the subject matter probably due to the depressing events of saturday night, when my heart was crushed into a million tiny little pieces....

i've tried to forget it, but my mind keeps dwelling on it. it seems to have an agenda of its own....

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~kwheat93 May 16, 2007, 4:35:35 PM
:hug: I don't know what happened, but if you want to talk about it, you can talk to me....

I like the poem, though.... the way the lines are positioned really creates a cool effect! n_n
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*SeveruSeprentine May 16, 2007, 5:29:08 PM
I would ask what happened saturday, but I think I won't for your sake, it seems it made you really sad... :cries: The poem was beautiful!

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~100-percent-hp-fan May 16, 2007, 6:45:22 PM
:sniff: That's really good, and really sad!
Just one thing... the line 'nothing can vill the void' is it supposed to be fill, instead of vill? Apart from that, I really like it!
:hug: I hope you feel better soon! It's annoying how your mind always focuses on the one thing you don't want to think about. Anyway, if you need to talk to someone, feel free to contact me!

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~AnimeLuver16 May 17, 2007, 1:56:24 PM
:hug: awwww.. its really nice, but even still.. awww.. :hug:

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~laurabeth May 18, 2007, 1:53:13 PM
I really love the shape, you have done quite well when it comes to that. Though it's a bit sketchy as to what it all means, but that's just me.

Typo, too. Vill instead of Fill

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~SelineSaintClair May 18, 2007, 6:38:02 PM
Awww... do you want to tell me about it, it's alright if you don't... but I hope you know I'm here for you.
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=living4him May 19, 2007, 6:52:27 AM
I like the layout and just...the words captavate me.

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wo ai ni 我愛你 (((I love you)))
my brothers, love one ANOTHER unconditionally, for love covers over a multitude of sins 1 Peter 4:8
I will always love you.
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~enely May 21, 2007, 5:07:07 PM
Whoa, amazing :eyepopping:

You managed to capture the feeling of loneliness in the writing AND in the shape :heart:

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~y0ungkwang Jun 25, 2007, 7:25:03 PM
Nice...... very nice Mandy :)
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